Ingrid ([info]hello_spawnling) wrote,
@ 2009-02-11 21:32:00
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Entry tags:character:asano rin, character:doa, fandom:blade of the immortal

Breather [DoaRin R]
Title: Breather
Fandom: Blade of the Immortal
Characters: Rin, Doa
Word Count: 525
Warnings: Girlsex
Notes: Written for [info]31_days and the prompt "my shadow pinned against a sweaty wall". Thanks to [info]senri for the beta!


During the time in the tunnels under Edo castle, the many hours, maybe days, of charging through the shadows toward unknown enemies, she only stumbles once.

It will only get harder the further they get, Rin knows, and eyes Doa's bloody sword with a surge of worry. The girl will only make it if she keeps calm. She will only keep calm if Rin does the same.

They leave the torch-lit passages behind and enter billowing darkness, chilly and damp against her bare arms. The adrenaline is diffusing in her veins, leaving her hands prickly, her throat dry, her ears filled by the dull sound of her own heartbeats. Ice-cold water soaks through the soles for her sandals, numbing her feet. The floor is as slippery as glass.

When she loses her footing, she finds she has been expecting it.

Doa is by her side in an instant, shoving her against the wall to keep her upright. For such a tiny girl Doa can be surprisingly strong, and Rin grits her teeth so as not to cry out when she is forcefully slammed into stone.

She doesn't realize until Doa stands on her toes and presses their bodies closer together that her hip is rubbing sharply between Rin's legs, the touch sending little sparkling jolts up her spine. It can't possibly be on purpose, Rin decides, biting down on a gasp.

It's hard to breathe, harder to think. Doa grinding against her feels better than what should be allowed, and Rin's hands fail at pushing her away again and again, fluttering over her shoulders like undecided butterflies. She wonders in panic if Doa even knows what it is she's doing, but then the girl grabs her braids and pulls her head down for a kiss that makes it clear that yes, yes, she does.

Doa's lips are smeared with the iron taste of blood. For a dizzying second, the thought of men cut to shreds in the tunnels behind fly through Rin's mind and it would likely make her hurl if only Doa's hip wasn't so insisting, wasn't moving faster and faster, rough and precise in just the right amounts until Rin pushes her head back against the stone and breathes out the pleasure in one trembling, shallow sigh.

The feeling is abruptly cut short when Doa draws back and away. She adjusts her robe with natural indifference, and her face tells only of impatience.

"Gotta be fast, Rin," she says and sticks her chin up. "Gotta be fast, but you gotta keep cool," and with that she sets off into the dark on quick, silent steps.

Rin stares after her in disbelief – because, really, some nerve of the little hypocrite – but there has never been a worse time to argue, so she stuffs away her pride and irritation for later and follows.

Though the ground below is slippery and uneven, her feet are steady, the foothold is new. The darkness chases after her, snapping at her heels, but when she speeds up she finds she can outrun it. Ahead, Doa's blade is a glimmer of light.

She licks her lips and tastes the iron.

FIN




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[info]tl__dr
2009-02-11 09:48 pm UTC (link)
The girl will only make it if she keeps calm. She will only keep calm if Rin does the same.

I'M ALREADY HOOKED DJFKDFJ Seriously, that's such perfect Rin-on-Rin/Doa, it really is. ahhh I'm excited for this fic.

And...

She doesn't realize until Doa stands on her toes and presses their bodies closer together that her hip is rubbing sharply between Rin's legs, the touch sending little sparkling jolts up her spine. It can't possibly be on purpose, Rin decides, biting down on a gasp.

It's hard to breathe, harder to think. Doa grinding against her feels better than what should be allowed, and Rin's hands fail at pushing her away again and again, fluttering over her shoulders like undecided butterflies. She wonders in panic if Doa even knows what it is she's doing, but then the girl grabs her braids and pulls her head down for a kiss that makes it clear that yes, yes, she does.


MY EXCITEMENT

PAYS OFF

I just love your...tightly written smut, it's always so immediate and urgent because of how delightfully sparing your language is and I don't really know how else to describe it but I LOVE IT. I love it when you write these two characters, too, so I'm just in heaven right now.

And realistic. Your smut is PAINFULLY realistic Ingrid this:

Doa's lips are smeared with the iron taste of blood. For a dizzying second, the thought of men cut to shreds in the tunnels behind fly through Rin's mind and it would likely make her hurl if only Doa's hip wasn't so insisting, wasn't moving faster and faster, rough and precise in just the right amounts until Rin pushes her head back against the stone and breathes out the pleasure in one trembling, shallow sigh.

I saw all of this SO VIVIDLY because it was just. SO REAL, ah I wish I had better words to explain my love for your words I really do but I LOVE YOUR WORDS

She adjusts her robe with natural indifference, and her face tells only of impatience.

"Gotta be fast, Rin," she says and sticks her chin up. "Gotta be fast, but you gotta keep cool," and with that she sets off into the dark on quick, silent steps.

Rin stares after her in disbelief – because, really, some nerve of the little hypocrite – but there has never been a worse time to argue, so she stuffs away her pride and irritation for later and follows.


AHAHAHAHHAHAHAHA

THIS IS ADORABLE. TOTALLY ADORABLE. And so so so THEM. And that ending...bringing it all around, giving the smut such purpose and meaning. UGH THIS IS SO GOOD, I love ever word.

i know i said your maitara was my favorite thing you've written, and i hate to be fickle, but um...this just...um....took its place...whoops

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[info]hello_scorpling
2009-02-13 07:12 am UTC (link)
ksdjfhksjdfhksj Oh wow, I always love your comments. Do you have any idea how flattered I feel when reading them? ♥

Thank you so much, Mona! I can't do anything about my writing style at this point, I'm stuck with the sparse sentences by now, so I'm glad it works out. I had a lot of fun writing this, even if anything resembling smut always is extremely difficult for me.

I WISH I HAD A BETTER REPLY but I'm just happy you liked it! <33

ps I don't think you're fickle at all. B)

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[info]ew_younerd
2009-02-13 05:27 am UTC (link)
D: .................. how do you write smut so well

you're the only person that makes me not embarrassed when i read it ....


YOU ALSO WRITE ORGASMS VERY WELL INGRID IT'S KIND OF AMAZING. YOU ALWAYS HAVE A UNIQUE WAY OF WRITING THEM I NOTICED THIS WITH A VOYEUR FIC YOU WROTE AND A TYZULA ONE AND NOW THIS .....

also you'll get a better written reply later but ...;kl;k wow ...

Edited at 2009-02-13 05:28 am UTC

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[info]hello_scorpling
2009-02-13 07:15 am UTC (link)
LMAO I honestly...don't think I'm that good at it. XD I'm always so embarrassed writing it and skim over most sauce details in favor of gross details that aren't really related to the sexings themselves, in the hope it will distract from my inability to describe, you know, what the genitals are really up to.

SO IDK I'm accepting the compliment, though! The orgasm is the part I actually like writing. B) So thank you, sweetnose.

Also what voyeur fic...

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[info]lanoyee
2009-04-01 07:50 pm UTC (link)
Interesting, and I reeeaaally like your style! Intense, intense. Also maybe a little hot.

I just. Like it a lot. :D

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[info]hello_scorpling
2009-04-02 04:48 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! ♥ I'm glad you do.

also sjdfh Doa/Rin is very hot, and you know it. B)

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[info]lanoyee
2009-04-02 04:59 pm UTC (link)
jsdlfjs curse you for making me ship it more >___>

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[info]hello_scorpling
2009-04-02 05:04 pm UTC (link)
VICTORY o/

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[info]revengeisalie
2009-04-02 05:06 pm UTC (link)
._.v Keywords relevant.

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[info]hello_scorpling
2009-04-02 05:10 pm UTC (link)
aaw ♥ AAAWW

I love those two together, platonically or otherwise. And I swear. Samura ships it, too.

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[info]lanoyee
2009-04-02 05:14 pm UTC (link)
l-lol THAT IS WHAT I ALWAYS SAY ABOUT ANOTSU/RIN.

Maybe Samura really does ship everything ever. Or - let's say, he pays attention to ALL the relationships. :333

But srsly, the farewell scene.

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[info]hello_scorpling
2009-04-02 05:17 pm UTC (link)
HAHAHAHAHA I use that argument about all my pairings. XD The way he treats them all... You can consider everything canon if you ant to, at least if Rin is part of the pairing.

Farewell scene, yes. :<

Also ksjdfhdj Anotsu/Rin is such borderline canon, as far as I'm concerned. XD Gah, I love them.

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[info]lanoyee
2009-04-02 05:20 pm UTC (link)
Lmfao, oh Rin and her shippability.

THE DAGGER AND ALREADY SOMETHING CARVED INSIDE.

Weeeell, I dunno, there's still the little matter of what he did to her between them, I think. :< But I can see some awkward/snarky BFFery. xD

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